Less IS more, I agree, and only rarely do I find stories where that is true. Yours is one story where that is true!
However, I would have liked a little bit (and I mean a little bit) more about the grasp or the physicality of the situation, maybe as a catalyst for our imagination
The Story Master and Story Mistress, as usual, keeping us updated on how this maze of a website is updated using items and more items. Wouldn't it be better for all if there is a FAQ page, that is on the main page and that links to all these items and answers all our questions!
The item itself is clear and straight to the point!
Too optimistic for my liking, but to be sure, they are beautiful wishes. I understand that a number of Christians live in the region, and in between synagogues and mosques there should have been churches and the holy land is holy for the three faiths and I didn't like their exclusion
The rhymes are cool, and the flow is easy and I liked everything about it in that sense.
As a very well informed middle-eastern, I found your puzzle quite interesting, however you could made life easier for you and me, stick to single words.
Prime Minister of Lebanon should be Sunni is more than sufficient, and Maronite is more the sufficient. It would have made the puzzle easier for viewing. it also helps when considering there is no standard spelling for Nouri Al-Malki. You could have asked for the first name only.
The very few intersection you have make the puzzle quite hard to solve
I was heart broken by the subject, by the content but not necessarily by the writing style. The style resembles prose more than poetry, and it resembles free flow rather than structure.
The title should be "for what the Palestinians are feeling" not "what the palestine's are feeling"
Capital P and plural and no need for the apostrophe shows me weak command for the language, is this a second or third language to you?
Makes a good case on behalf of the trees! I feel bad for the Christmas trees, year after year I look in my friends houses and see trees that don't belong but are indoors.
Others planted a Christmas tree outdoors and decorated each year, while keeping it alive. However, in my part of the world, the trees come from a special area in the forest where they grown for 10-15 years for that exact purpose, so taking their lives seems trivial, since they wouldn't be there if it weren't for Christmas.
I do like your writing style, however, I feel you tend to overuse the brackets (or maybe I don't use them enough) Brackets aren't intended to be used in dialogue.
I liked you writing style, I had a good laugh, but I just didn't feel like it added up together, perhaps because of the too many paragraphs you have.
The item is rather short so there isn't much to say, however, I could have accepted it more if there was a little bit more interaction between the characters. A good time to add some would be betwwen the coming of farmer sam.
Thanks for a good read!
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