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Review of MY HEART  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I think this is a decent direction for a universal occurrence.

A few basic format and punctuation errors disrupted the flow a bit.

thank you :)
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I like the casual meandering way this goes. Letter poetry is something I find difficult, it sounds contrived when I reread them.

This one is a very lightly intimate piece, and I liked the ending, sweetly familial...

be well

John
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Review of Evening Segue  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I found this to be an enjoyable read. The melancholy the first two lines, is neatly suspended in the following few lines.

I think the neat pinning in place of the dance floor image is marred by the word 'Gliding' as a salsa beat to me, is no smooth glide, but more of a throb, writhe, thing. But in truth I would have struggled with choosing a word for just there.

I thoroughly enjoyed the juxtaposition of the ending line. It provided a strong tie-in to the beginning theme.

thank you for sharing this.

and, be well

[john]
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