This took me a few readings to fully take in but I found its rhythm and symbolism quite captivating. I could imagine this and the image of "slow bathes the old-timer with death" gave me chills. You have quite a gift for poetry. The one constructive criticism would be "breathe". Did you mean "breath"?
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