I really enjoyed reading this. the interraction with the children and the tenderness expressed between these two obviously in love people. You kept me interested nearly till the end when Trevor started having voiced discomfort about the pregnancy. For one thing, you make no comment about the ages of the children. And then I would think whatever the ages if there were such a high concern about a pregnancy, Christmas morning, since it is obviously early on, wouldn't be the time to drop it on the kids. Like I said this really is all contingent on the ages of the children. Otherwise itis a lovely story that I enjoyed reading. I am including the 150 points so that you can essentially hold on to your points for that upgrade.
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mamu
I liked this. No mamby-pamby. You have to get in there and don some of the work which is over and abobe writing. After all isn't this why we are here to begin with? I like your style. I think you must be a teacher in real time
This is beautiful and well there are many other adjectives in my heart from a long ago memory. This should be used for something important, somewhere. anywhere I love every line of it.
boy could I see this from both ends of this frustrating customer relations typical headache. I do love the written thoughts of the obvious, as well as the colloquial wording. Was cool!
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MiaAkasha
To me this is absolutely perfect. Bless you for realizing that there was a lesson to be learned in that horrible summer. If there were spelling or grammatical errors I didn't see them. I did see a man who is most likely a wonderful Dad because it takes a man to a Dad and you became one that very night.
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MiaAkasha
This was cool. How many times have we been caught in that annon lie? Absolutely mud on the face!
I enjoyed your writing and think you could really expound on this. What do you think?
This is very emotional to read. I believe, if you touch the reader's emotional self, than you have done a good job. If you truly are an amputee, as this sounds so true, you are so much more than incomplete no matter how terminal ther Severing may be.
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MiaAkasha
We share much in common. I, too, have boxes!!!!
and my family call me their "stationary fluff". that should about give you a picture.
Keep working at you , you are talented.
mamu
I think this was a good effort. I,too, like things about the war we have suffered through and the men that made our safety possible. I think there should be some elaboration here. Maybe explaining Gallipoli a bit and the importance of it. Explaining just a bit what the acronym ANZAC means for the reader. Keep writing we learn to write by doing it.
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mamu
Amen Aaron,
What a beautiful expression of hope. I am sitting here and thinking to mysefl, if just saying "mornin'" to a stranger, here, in Massachusetts is more often than not given a reply in kind but with eyes that say "what's it to ya". I think, tomorrow I will add, at least once, what's your favorite color. That is if I can get the courage. Yes I will get the courage. I think it took lots of courage to just write this and hit the post button.
I like what that says about you.
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mamu
Thank you so very much for sharing Puppy and Snoopy with us. this is a wonderful story of a wondful pair of lives. There is so much I could say but that would lead me to babble ( which I do very well) and this is about you and your beasutiful pups . thak you again.
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mamu
This is absolutely awesome. You truly captured the color for me, which I might add, I do also love. Wow I have got to get my thinking hat on. You got me wanting to create something colorful.
I am giggleing. This is adorable and it made me wonder how we must really sound to our furry friends. I am the "Mom" of 4 dachshunds who, if any of you know if them, are quite verbal. They are also quite likely to disobey with charm. Not to mention a smile, I swear as they repeat everything you have just gone on about stopping. You have truly conveyed a great sentiment. I think I'll go give my canine kids a boney and lay on the sofa with them.
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