Now, maybe I don't like what the kids watch nowadays, maybe I'm not into the romance crap, and the angel crap, but I still read this. And while I feel I would be giving a bias review if I just said, 'This storyline was boring, the idea behind it is heavy-handed, and it moves too slow to catch a reader's attention, God forbid we think about a movie-goer and the general attention span of the populace!' instead I will just point out specific parts I found were a bit 'much' or just typos
"Although mine’s at the age when she laughing at me and not with me."
that should be 'when she's' or 'when she is'
SUPER: (O)ctober (N)inth, (T)welve (I)nstantly, (M)idnight (E)xactly. (The first letters come together spelling ’On Time’)
nice idea, especially if the movie kind of makes fun of itself. however, where is it's placement in this movie? this is the only scene with a narrator, with anything being spelt out like that, i can imagine it in my head for a goofy movie where everything is melodramatic; but this is just odd? especially for a movie based around guardian angels?
As we move around the couple, after about 20 seconds, the two teenagers change into Stan and Rita.
20 seconds is a long time, i would say stare at a wall for 20 seconds and see how long you can stand it. And then imagine having to watch some weird couple make out for 20 seconds.
JOHN (O.S.) It’ll haunt you for the rest of your life.
an echo? really?
HOMELESS GUY (calling out) Good luck, Mr. Stan! I’m sure everything will be just fine! (to himself) Just fine.
I find it pointless for him to say it to himself again, like we've seen that in movies and shows where they do it, I find it pointless (that's just me!)
Sharon’s lifeless eyes stare back at us. Upon her limp arm is a watch: the slender watch Stanley has been wearing with the other two watches.
This was actually a very nice moment
I also found Brian to be needlessly antagonistic towards Stan. Like, okay yes, he's doing all the work that should be his, I know his motives NOW. But... before that point, it just seemed needlessly cruel when Stan's wife died because he was late. Does Brian not know this connection, or not care? I'm glad he never went too far, and Stan had his fair share of being an asshole as well, i guess. IDK
I actually did read the whole thing through, even if it was just to get 2,750 gps. And honestly... i don't see anyone going for this. But i don't know what the people want. Maybe this is gonna be a church hit, a cult classic, but to me it's boring, needlessly long, and could probably be an okay short film if you cut out enough of it. No hard feelings, just opinions. |
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