When I started to read this I thought it was awesome, but the farther through the poem I read, the less I liked it. Towards the end the line lost their flow and made it seem kind of choppy to me, especially compared to the beginning. I would consider rephrasing or replacing words in the last few stanzas.
I think this is a really nice poem but the flow of it seems off. Trying to read it outloud, I get hung up as if the words don't match. I would consider rewording some of the lines to make the current of it work better. Other than that, its entertaining, and kind of cute. Like it.
This is interesting. I'm undecided on whether I like it or not. I think the whole dolphin, whale thing was confusing. Before I read those last few lines it seemed to have a deeper meaning, but then it seemed to lose it. I would consider rewriting or rephrasing those two lines.
This is interesting; I can't decide whether I like this or not. I don't think I follow the whole plot of it but the flow is really nice. The beginning makes me feel panic but then the last line makes me pissed off at whoever caused it. Its interesting the contrast it creates for me. I'd leave it how it is basically because it gets people to think.
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