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Review by Lucien Tattalya Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is beautiful, and I love the way you showcase it.
One advice would be to look and try to make it flow seamlessly "I kissed your lips and glowing smile" for instance do not seem to resonate well with the other lines. Also, the last line can be improved to invoke the same sense of imagery in the other lines. it would provide a nice end.
It is probably a fault on my part though, I always wish for the poem to leave something to the imagination
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