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Review by Louie Lovelock Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is a lovely story, though the paragraphs could be formatted better. I think it is uncommon to read stories in the third person. I enjoyed this sentence. "Samuels tenses and furrows his brows. Even just holding this sword to a man's neck makes his arms ache. There's a faint tremor to his legs that betray his battle-ready stance."
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a great story. The first-person view of the narrator generates a unique view of human worth. If you would like to go deeper, might I recommend Kant's Categorical Imperative?

One thing: Please format quotations more. Other than that, great start!


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