In the last fiew reviews I've given, I have more or less explained how it is necessary for stories like these to find a crucial balance between control and freedom. It seems you need no such instruction on that. This world is nicely established and the stories thus far do a good job of setting up how the otherworldly power can be used.
I look forward to seeing how this story will evolve.
I wouldn't mind a review, but I'd also like some help. For some reason my new story won't show up on the main page. I know there's a trick, but its been so long that I've forgotten it. Could somebody help?
Well this is something else. I suppose I have to give you credit for the story's raw bluntness. "You are the last." However, this is a very limiting aspect. I find that when I read, I often skim through action bits until I reach some sweet and juicy dialogue. People in general like stories with a lot of character interaction. I have my own story and started the first thread with a plot similar to yours with one lone person wandering around a seemingly deserted world. I reconfigured it for the second thread to include character interaction because the first was just so boring. I ask you to go read my story Residents, read through the first two options and tell me which one you found less difficult to follow.
Definately a top rate interactive. I have only read a fraction of what has been written by you and your fans, but what I have read, I really liked. Felix and the various Prisoners have all been compelling and rather sympathetic characters. I only wish that my story had your levle of depth.
A most promising base for a story. I would love to contribute but I tend to get a little excentric for this genre. However I do look forward to coming back in a month and reading through at least 2 dozen chapters.
If i might make a suggestion, give the Overlord a lover eventually.
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