I loved it. Your writing is solid, as is your vocabulary. Personally didn't see why it had to get kinda smutty there on the beach, but hey just because I don't think so doesn't mean it's a bad thing. Really liked the ending. "Kerry fired another crossbow bolt into Anton" felt a little redundant though. You didn't really need to specify who "Kerry" was firing at. Overall I loved the idea and execution was pretty great too.
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