This poem evokes teenage angst, anger, weariness of life which begins to wear down the subject of the poem and consumes her completely. It seems a relevant description of what it is like to be popular and the pressures and expectations it masks. Life is an illusion, and gradually the illusion begins to show on the subject, the reality of her life becomes too much and it ends in tragedy, there is no sorrow just and empty bed where once there was a glimmer of light. The rhyme and rhythm of the poem seem to accentuate the tragedy.
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> IMAGERY: Good and vivid.
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> Brings the reader into the poem and gazing up at the night sky and a cool night of viewing Which is always the best!.
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> The spectacle above draws young and old alike as if calling to them to view its magnificence , the reader can almost see a version of Van Gogh's starry night in the flow of words and images.
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> The words life the reader up to peace, harmony, stardust dreams of youth, life and the universal consciousness of the cosmos .
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> We can see the light emanating from above and below warming and mingling into memories and a journey within and without.
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> We can gaze into the illumination of the night until the sun brings it's newness to the following day.
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> EMOTIONAL CHORD STRUCK:
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> Stargazing on the highest level in an obvious cosmic consciousness of peace and well being.
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> The poet becomes the guide to the night sky.
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> Is the poet reaching toward God's creation and beyond?
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> The poet honors the magnificence of the cosmos and the universe that lies beyond.
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> TONE: Good depth of feelings.
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> A poem that can take one to a peaceful place and lifts the reader to the night and it's splendor.
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> SPELLING ERRORS: None found.
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> FLOW: Flow is good. The word choice is good, with good descriptions.
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> OVERALL: Good read. Please keep sharing.
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