I found myself anticipating a great punch-line to this story and was both relieved and disappointed at what I found Relieved because this story reminded me of others that too often end with the passing of the 'Dad'. And disappointed because I expected something more powerful than the arrival of a stove in the middle of a heat wave. But it was a pleasure to read and drew me completely in. I was able to visualize the room, the windows, even the bed and coverings. It was delightful and had a great flow. I found myself smiling through most of the tale. I think you did a fantastic job. The story set a very humble feeling to it and perhaps that is why I struggled with "matriculated" being used. I think a similar-meaning more common word would've fit in better.
I am new to writing.com and am pleased to have found such a great piece to do one of my first reviews. I hope to pen something soon - I can only hope it's half the quality effort you've done here! Thanks for sharing and I look forward to finding other treasures on this site.
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