powerful insightful - perhaps the title could have related to the idea of numbers- l
love the statement of people not being linear- excellent work - lisa
perhaps you could reflect on some of my things when you have the chance
love the flow rain hitting retinas and drops of blood admiring themselves very
creative - excellent lexicon and symbolism -lisa
happy holidays would love some input on my work as well t you
like it the cycle of love and discovery and the feeling of loss and return to the state of which you began
if you have a chance could you read some of mine ?regards lisamarie
like the pacing and the metaphorical comparisons of making choices in relationships and whether or not to continue -
spoke to me for sure as have had to make similar decisions over the past few months - good work
like the revolting spirit urges me line (:
if you have a chance could you look at some of my work
I like the ideas some of the (punctuations) soemtimes too many
commas can break the flow- should be didn't -
instead of learnt learned -
but i like the refrain and the ideas presented - the feeling of loss and wishing to
return to a chereished moment are universal -keep writing - best wishes lisa
hmm i like the walked on wishing iconoclasm line -
like the descriptives as well kind of hunorous and historical at once
going back and forth in time - and place - good job mister -
The details make one remember the years and stages of life -
it made me tear up a bit and recollect my own boxes,
memories and things to sort - touching - poignant -
Joe - this is good stuff - as a teacher it is true to real life- i would be a milionaire if I counted the times in as month I was told to f- off -
as a person who has been in the midst - with a young son - the chaos of emotions is well described - but you maintain hunor throughout
to keep the reader's attention - bravo - lisa and the parallels between each of you make it even more heartwarming
such excellent descriptives - I can completely visualize your scenes -
very sam shephard like - I can almost hear his voice in a narrative -
i love that expression scared s***less - it cracks me up everytime -l
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