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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
It was good but there never was any motivation given as to why she suddenly decided to betray the person she had feelings for. A little more buildup of her mental turmoil about whether or not to betray the Sultan would have been nice. Also, she knew she was speaking with the Shaytan the entire time yet only decides to not trust him at the last minute? Why not the Shaytan come disguised and she realize who he is at the end?

I liked it but it seemed a little rushed.
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