That was really nice. I like how you set the mood for your story as a sort of hazy view of the past. Maybe have some longer sentences? The sentences felt a little short for me, but maybe that might be your style, I don't know. I like how you sort of centered the entire story on you grandmother. You portrayed her character very clearly. Especially how you seem to make her a sort of scary character in the beginning, but bring it around to her being nice in the very end. By the way, I hate elevators too ;).
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