Good stuff! Although the beats were sometimes off in the lines, I don't think that you were going for a strict accentual syllabic structure. I liked the call out to Mr, Trump, as if it gave a face to the cold corporate culture within America. Thank you for the read, and keep up the good stuff!
I enjoyed the minimalistic style and post-modern vibe I received from the poem, but wished I had some more information or content to make the poem more engaging and meaningful. Perhaps the addition of a visual? Nonetheless, good stuff!
That was a wonderful poem to read, I particularly enjoyed the first two lines you had written. There is a good balance within the use of ABAB within your quatrains. I also noted the change up in rhyme scheme within the final quatrain, which seemed to add emphasis and a break in flow to illustrate the emotion in the words.
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