I want to start off by saying I am not an expert of writing and poem, so all I can give is my opinion. I hope it won’t offend you but help you instead. Feel free to take my advice or disregard it.
Overview: Very pleasant read. I can feel the love held for the "Little Girl".
Strengths: Good rhythms and nice flow. No spelling errors.
Questions: It mentions she is precious, but doesn't state more about that. What makes her precious?
Suggestions: I wish it was longer, so we could get to know more about "Little Girl". More descriptive words to help paint a greater picture of her in our minds.
Nice job and I encourage you to keep on write, and I would gladly read more of your work. Thank you for sharing it with us on writing.com. Keep on writing!
I want to start off by saying I am not an expert of writing and poem, so all I can give is my opinion. I hope it won’t offend you but help you instead.
Overview: It was a nice read, can feel emotions throughout.
Strengths: Nice rhythm, good job with rhymes.Good choice of words used.
Questions: No questions. I found no errors or typos.
I think you did a good job and I encourage you to keep on write, and I would gladly read more of your work. Thank you for sharing it with us on writing.com. Keep on writing!
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