Loved this! You carried the title repeatedly throughout the poem. Also your analogies were all very picturesque. For example, the cards and the knight in shining armor.
I'm not sure if the person is still part of your world but in the end you very honest in wanting to help them. I didn't get the feeling that you hated them.
This poem was although very real and hit home. It still had some fresh air to it, if you will. For example, with the analogy of the sand and the beach.
Well done! I can't wait to check out the rest of your portfolio! I would welcome any feedback from you as well.
Very good! I didn't expect it to be on the subject of race. Which makes me love it even more! You spoke truth in light but powerful way. Indeed graceful but heart-wrenching.
My words and feelings are where many of us have been and maybe still are....keep writing and inspiring. Those that know you personally need you and know your worth!
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