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Review of Smallville - Quiz  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Love the program smallville and I was amazed that I got 8 out of 10. I must be slacking. How could I have missed them? :)

Great quiz. Loved it.

Smallville admirer,
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Review of Hope Dies  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
A courageous and inspirational poem about how one sees the world and especially when one thinks that hope has gone in one's life.

If I may suggest, that you make each paragraph about 4 lines and it will run smoother and this way the flow will also be visible in one's mind when one reads the poem.

Beautifully written.
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Review of Waiting to Live  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a great start for your poem. It may be that you have decided not to put much rhyme rto this poem and that's fine. I do think that it would do very nicely as a rhyme and more flow.

I do find that this poem jumps a bit and again keeping topics in one paragraph would be good.

A great job and a wonderful start.
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Review of Light and Dark  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This is a wonderful poem. I would like to suggest that you break this poem into paragraph and the rhyme of this poem would stand out more.

I do not see any typing errors and you could add some punctuation which you have created some paragraphs.

Overall this poem is great. A little improvement and it was merit a higher rating.

Lady_lily
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Review of Abuse  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
This is a poem that depicts how the poet has endured pain through life. An expression of darkness that reigns during the younger years.

I have found that poetry is a wonderful expression that can heal the body and soul. You have done a wonderful job of this as I can also relate to the turmoil in one's life.

The poem is great. Your flow and rhyme keeps the reader wanting to finish the poem.

Great job.

Lady_lily
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Review of A Raindrop Falls  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I really enjoyed this poem. I have never had told to me about the rain in this fashion. It holds my interest in reading your version of the rain falling.


A quick note:
It heals the wound 'pon its dry lips.
This word is not in the dictionary I would suggest "upon"

Another quick note:
I dying on the cold, hard ground.
I think what you are trying to say is:
I died on the cold, hard ground

Great job. Keep writing.

Lady_lily
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Review of lost  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.0)
Overall the poem is good. You will need to capitalize in this poem and you will need punctuation so the reader can read it's depth and emotion.

The poem needs a little more work but if you create the last paragraph into lines and into the poem it would work better.

A quick note:
This line has a typing error
didnt kno how much i loved you til i lost you,
it should read didn't know

Another quick note:
didn't should be typed as didn't

Keep up the good work and keep writing.
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Review of Walk  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A great interpretation through the eyes of a poet. It relates their expression about daily life and how they see it.

The title itself relates to the poem "Walk" and also the flow and rhyme are really good.

A great job and I enjoyed reading your poem.

Lady_lilt
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Review of You Awaken Me  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
A wonderfully created poem and great rhyme and flow. A wonderful expression of love through the eyes of the poet.


One quick note:
The sound of your voice ingnites a fire
There is a spelling error and it should read:
The sound of your voice ignites a fire.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
A beautiful poem. A heartfelt poem. All I can say as the tears flow, I loved it very much.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
A wonderful flowing and rhyming poem. The simplicity depicts the title with good structure. There are no typing errors or additional puntuation needed.

A very good read. I would like to wish you good luck in the poetry contest. Your poem is excellent in my book.

Lady_lily
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Review of My Enemy  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
This is an intense poem. An expression of intense pain spoken through poetry.

I find the flow and rhyme are really great. The poem relays a lot to the viewer and how it impacts a person's perspective on hate and life.

I am saddened by the poem but I find it is really well created.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Wonderfully created. I love the flow and rhyme. The comparison of what you want and what other people want you to be.

A quick note: (This line)
They tell me to be Atlas,
It would flow better if you change it to this.
They tell me to be an Atlas,

Wonderful created.

Lady_lily
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Review of Urges consume me  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
A wonderful flowing and rhyming poem. It's speaks of duality between the conscious and sub-conscious mind.

A quick note: (This sentence)
Both promise things will complicate

I find that it is not flowing and stops suddenly loosing it's place in the poem.


Wonderfully done.
Lady_lily
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Review of Hatred  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I liked this poem because it depicts how somone sees things around them and expresses it on paper.

It is different but I like it with it's flow and rhyme.

Overview: There are no punctuation or spelling errors. The title is depicted in words through through the poem.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I found this poem to be an emotional and inspiring poem about a person who with tragedy in their life surpassed all the pain and become triumphant.

The strength from without became an anchor to apply to daily life.

A wonderful journal of one's life and how one overcame tragedy.

A quick note:
scalpul cutting into my chest
One spelling error: It should read
scalpel cutting into my chest

Lady_lily
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Review of TOO  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem has good flow and rhyme. It is a simple but expressive poem that warrants recognition.

Expressing every day life in such a short poem is exceptional.

Overall View:
Wonderful and exceptional poem, no punctuation errors, and flow and rhyme are great.

Good job. Keep writing.

Lady_lily
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Review of You are not alone  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Newbie Challenge REVIEWERS

This poem speaks of inner struggle with oneself and the expression in this poem is a balance of emotions.

A wonderful expressive and inspirational poem.


One quick note:
Noone to speak too, noone to call your own?
There are two typing errors (see suggestion below):
No one to speak too, no one to call your own?

Lady_lily
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Review of My Rhyming Haiku  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Newbie Challenge REVIEWER

This is a great inspiration for summer weather and how we love it so much. Beautifully written.

I was really getting into the poem but to me it ended so soon. I would have loved to read more on this poem.

Overall: Wonderfully written with flow and rhyme.

Great Job.
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Review of Reach  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This is such a wonderful and inspiring poem. A little sad but the way your come across is that maybe it's time to move on. Sometimes we can't hold on to things and we have to let go.

A loved the title "Reach". That is why I clicked on your poem. The title just stood out for me.

Wonderful poem.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a good start to a story. I think you will need to revise this story abit. Mostly for the punctuation. I have given you some samples below.

Overall it has good imagination and makes a good story.

Just a quick note:
Yes!"I replied sounding a little to excited.
It should read "too excited".

Just a quick note:
It felt weird to think of each other with anyone else,we thought we were meant to be,everyone did.If someone bothered me they would be sorry and if anyone bothered him I was always there.

It could read like this:
It felt weird to think of each other with anyone else. We believed we were meant to be together, as everyone else thought. We were watching out for each other when problems arose.

Just a quick note:
On June,14,2005 I went to his 12th birthday party,no one could shut up about how good we looked together and that we were going to grow up and get married,we just sat there and thought "that would be us."

Maybe like this:
On June 14, 2005 I went to his 12th birthday party and no one could stop talking about how good we looked together. We were going to grow up and get married and sat quietly and thought "that would be us."

Keep up the good work.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I found your poem was well versed and punctuation was also done well. Overall, this is a great poem. Only a few notes below.

Just A Quick Note:
What is that so special about the night,
I think what you meant to say was:
What is it, that's so special about the night, OR,
What is so special about the night,

The second stanza when I read these 2 lines it does not make sense to me:
And may help to lay,
All your bad thoughts away

The word lay: help to lay all your bad thoughts. Maybe you can use another word other than lay.


Great job and wonderful poem.

Lady_lily
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Review of beauty  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I like the concept of your poem but I found it did not talk to me. In other words, myself being the reader found that it did not have the essence of expression. I think you can do wonders with this poem. Maybe re-word it and create two lines into one.

Overall the concept of the poem is great. This is only my opinion.

Lady_lily
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Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
This forum has been very supportive to me and my poetry. The reviews given as honest and constructive. I would recommend this forum to new and current poets to visit and make themselves comfortable.

I learned a lot from this forum, and also by reading the posts and comments. Great job Ratatosk.

Lady_lily
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Review of my mother  Open in new Window.
Review by lady_lily Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
A wonderful poem about a mother and child and how wonderful their relationship is.

I like the rhyme and the flow of this poem and your expression of your relationship with your mother. Your mother must be very product of you when she read this poem.

Lady_lily
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