I thought this was pretty good! I didn't see anything wrong with it, except that a few of the lines are a bit predictable. But that is the only thing I noticed, and overall I liked the poem. Good job!
LadyA
Quite true. The only thing is, once it gets taken out of the box onto someone's place they keep offering it. "Are you sure?" Arg. The best solution: wait for the conversation to get going and then quietly ask your table partner if they would like to split it with you. It works great. I'm actually having pizza tonight, here we go. Enjoyed it!
LadyA
Thank you for being brave enough to put this out here! I am also a Christian, belonging to the true Church, the Church of Christ, and I've been thinking about writing something like this, just kind of reaching out to people. I would love to get to know you so we can encourage and build each other up. Good job on this article.
LadyA
Great! This is one of those stories that makes you go "NO! It can't end yet!" Already you've put in a load of information about Cecily without making it sound like you're ticking them off of a list. That is a wonderful thing to be able to do. Things moved seamlessly from one subject to another. Good job. Let me know when you add more.
LadyApplesauce
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