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Review by Tim Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is the most interesting short story i've read, please do continue as I very much enjoyed reading it.
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Review by Tim Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very true haiku. It could definently be quotable but it's 4-7-5 currently, perhaps try and tag on a syllable eh? I truly like this haiku though, it sort of makes me feel more earthly and one with the world.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
I think you really have a lot of potential to evolve this poem into something great! However, the rhyme scheme is a bit dynamic in the sense that it suddenly changes and quits rhyming, a few grammitcal errors but as long as legiable it's really not a problem, it's just more of a professional thing that gives it a polished look by using spell check to make sure it's a satisfactory final draft. I suggest you could add a bit of depth, the current version seems a bit generic, hopefully this review is read and recieved as constructive criticism! If you'd ever like any help or further suggestions please feel free to let me know!
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