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Review of Alone  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This talks to me and reminds me of my teenage years (oh so many years ago). Dealing with so many new emotions and feelings, and having the people around you not quite understanding where you are coming from...

This is a good piece of writing. Thank you for sharing it.
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Review of Crimson Regret  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
This is such an intense piece of writing. The emotion is quite raw and heartfelt.

Only one thing for you to look at, and that is your spelling. Check words like 'relevant' and 'irrelevant' and 'happiness' among a few others.

But other than that it is really good. Thank you so much for sharing this.
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Review of The Wake Up  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I really love this!

As a 'cat person' I totally get where this has come from. How many mornings I have been woken too early due to hungry tummies.

In just a few short, and well-written words you have managed to create a vived scene that any cat owner in the world will understand.

Well done.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a lovely story! I plan on printing this out and reading it to my 4 year old nephew. I just hope I don't give him any ideas! LOL

The is well written and easy to read and understand for the young child. Your characters are easy to relate to.

This is a great story. Thank you for sharing.
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Review of Away and Away!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.0)
Obviously this is not finished...

I would like to know what age group it is aimed at? You have it marked as children's fiction, yet you use so very fancy language and big words that children may not relate to. You may need to revisit some of the language, particularly if this is aimed at the under 12's.

Also, your character needs a name and a description, fairly early on in the piece. It personalises them and gives the reader a sense of familiarity with them.

I think you have a strong foundation for a good story here. Best of luck with it.
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Review by KylieAnn Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is a really great story. I like how to her it is an eternity that she's been away. I also really like her chosen destination! :o)

The only thing I would suggest (and this is an opinion only so please feel free to ignore) is that when she comes home there should be some reference to the baby brother missing her or being quiet for her or something. Just to try and integrate that aspect back into the story.

But otherwise I really liked it. Well done and thank you for sharing.

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Review of Hink  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Now I know what it means! :o)

I like this. The flow of it is good and the storyline is well written. I would be curious to know what age bracket it is aimed at?

One thing though, what is your characters name? It didn't junp out at me the first time I read it and I didn't find it the second time when I was looking for it (I may have missed it). I think that use of a characters name personalises the character and gives the reader more empathy for them. Something to think about maybe.

Otherwise, well done.
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Review of THE LEGACY  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
:o)

I really really like this! It didn't go anywhere that I expected from the first few paragraphs, which is of course what makes it so good!

Your writing style is really good and I loved the imagery you used through the dreams at the beginning.

A wonderful read - thank you for sharing.
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Review by KylieAnn Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
This is a really good descriptive piece. You set the scene so well. The setting is vivid and alive.

A couple of things. In the first couple of sentences you start quite a number of sentences with either 'his' or 'he'. Look at some alternative ways to structure your sentences so that they begin with a variety of words.

Also, does your character have a name? It works well without, but might become more personal with a name.

Otherwise this is a really good descriptive piece.

Well done.
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Review by KylieAnn Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I love it!
Your factual account of the the events leading up to the unveiling of the troll was well written, entertaining, and only too close to some I know.
Trolls do indeed walk among us, and you have captured their essence brilliantly.
Thanks you for inviting me into your world.
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Review of Silence  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Wow!
I got lost within this.
You portray this lopsided friendship in such a wonderful way. You make the reader empathise with both characters. I felt Jared's pain. Could also feel Damon's hesitant openess.
A beautifully written, bittersweet love story.
Thank you for a great read.
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Review of Beginnings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
This is a great piece. Your use of spoken language draws you in. The tension in the room is palpable. The dual personality of Laurence giving it a sharp edge.
I would love to read the next stage in their lives. How they move forward from here. You have set the stage for a wonderful drama.
Thank you for a great read.
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