I love it! Although there are grammatical and spelling errors, it's amazing! I truly hope you continue on with this. This has an incredible amount of potential. I can't tell you how intriguing I find this story. When you become a published and famous author, I will be one of your biggest fans. Write on!
Overall I think the story line is pretty awesome. I appreciate the non dedication to any one religion. I can't wait to continue reading. The only advice I can give you is to work on the grammatical bits of it. It would make the story flow easier and would make comprehension easier to other readers. Keep up the good work!
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