Hi! i am Gerwyn Real and i will honest at reviewing your poem.
The title is confusing for me and do not relates to the poem, clearly.
I liked how you created a scene of poorly constructed road in an almost rural town using words; sloshy, commuters, autos, trucks, traction, speed limits.
What i liked most:- creative cuse of extended simile in the 3rd stanza - "bad road conditions often seem a dog
whose bark may be worse than its bite".
In a nutshell, it was good poem that created a cadence of a rainy day on a fairly crowded road with automobiles.
Hy I'm Gerwyn and I'll be reviewing your poem as I am in need of some GPS (kidding but true) in the mean time, I'll be honest and try my best, However following are will be my personal opinion.
I'm not impressed by your selection of title (give some thought if you intend others to pick up your item for review).
I couldn't clearly figure out the sense of this poem and read it few more times. Here's what I got:
First three lines - there's a bond among each components of nature and they communicates with (even be it for short time) great desire.
Here I am confused (4th,5th verses) who takes time to answer nature's words.
Later verses;we can easily outlook all the beauties, greatness nature provide us.
I am again confused and forced to think this poem as a contrast between disabilities of human flesh and superiority of human soul.
Lastly the word- Magnanimity bugged me , its a rare word I think , use a synonym instead .
Hope this helped .
I am curious to know in what sense you wrote this poem.
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