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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
Hello! On behalf of the "The Rockin' ReviewersOpen in new Window., brought to you by the Paper Doll Gang, I am happy to offer you my review of your item, "War and The Men Who Fight ItOpen in new Window.

Note: Any suggestion that I may offer is strictly a suggestion and is yours to do with however you see fit. My method of reviewing is based on honesty first and how I hope to be reviewed second.



I. ALL ABOUT ME--THE READER

*Question* How did this item affect my emotional side?

I am not a fan of war because I am not a fan of death, especially the death of young men and women; however, that does not mean I do not enjoy a well told war story. My emotions peaked in numerous directions while I read this short story. Would the young soldier make it home to meet his baby? Would the remaining soldiers return home to their families? Inevitably, the most asked question I have is how long will it take them to return to "normal" once they do arrive back home, if they get so lucky? You took me on a highly emotional ride here!


*Question* Was the message contained within unique and thought provoking? Or comical and entertaining?

The message of the short story was most definitely thought provoking as I showed above with my emotions.


*Question* Was the writing style easy to follow and pleasant to read?

The writing style is nice and smooth and is not over-burdened with an abundance of adjectives and adverbs allowing the reader to stay focused.


*Question* Did the item still have my full attention mid-way through?

The item did have my full attention mid-way through and kept it through to the end. I do have one thing I would like to mention though... at the end, when Pete showed up in the tank, I, the reader, had no idea who it was. I ended up having to go back to the first paragraph and re-read to understand that Pete had not been with them the entire time. You never want your reader to have to return to a previous section to get an understanding of what is happening.


*Question* Is this a piece that I would highly recommend to my friends and family to read?

Yes, I would recommend this short war story to my friends and family to read.


*Question* What did I find most compelling?

It appears that the author knows quite a bit about fighting in a war. I found the wording to be spot on, at least for a reader who has no military background whatsoever.



II. TECHNICAL & MECHANICAL

*Bullet* Stop it Sargent, he thought to himself.
*Idea* "Stop it Sargent" should be in italics since it is a personal thought.

*Bullet*Now soldier, Go!"
*Idea* Correct me if I am wrong, but I believe anytime a title is used in place of a person's name, i.e. "soldier", it should be capitalized. There are a few instances of this throughout the story.

*Bullet*but they said they didn't know when they could send it.
*Idea* Consider: "but they said they don't know when they can send it."

*Bullet*"Take cover! Head for the building."
*Idea* I would use an exclamation point for both rather than just the first. In a time such as this, excitement and anxiety is abounding.

*Bullet*In the distance they heard the Grenades going off.
*Idea* Should "Grenades" be capitalized?

*Bullet*"We found them Sarge,"
*Idea* Insert a comma before "Sarge".

*Bullet*"Don't thank me, your the one we should be thanking.
*Idea* "your" should be "you're"



III. OVERALL OPINION
I think this is a well thought out short story that depicted a very memorable moment for a soldier... the ending moment when his lost locket was found and given back to him. I could literally feel his relief when the sergeant handed it to him; it brought a tear to my eye! Thank you so much for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest if it is still running. *Wink*


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Hi! My name is Kristi and I will be judging "A Crayon Colored HeartOpen in new Window. for Round Two in ~A BROKEN *Heart* HEART POETRY CONTEST~



*Heart* THE POEM *Heart*

This piece invoked a different kind of sadness for me, the reader. Oftentimes when we read about a "broken heart", we tend to relate it to our own broken heart; however, this piece offered a different stance - the broken heart of a loved one - which offers a complete different sadness... one that seems to leave an even stronger feeling of helplessness. Fantastic job in bringing me straight into your words.



*Heart* RHYTHM/RHYME *Heart*

They rhythm and rhyme are perfect; each line flowed smoothly into the next and none of the rhymes are forced at all. Both of these are characteristics of a masterpiece!



*Heart* SPELLING/GRAMMAR *Heart*

No spelling or grammatical issues to be seen! Awesome!



*Heart* WHAT I LIKED *Heart*

As I already mentioned, I like that you took me on a different type of broken heart; one belonging to someone else, rather than ourselves. It is from being able to see it from the outside when we can often break our own patterns.



*Heart* FAVORITE PART *Heart*

"To her pillow, I placed a lace trimmed note.
Upon it, a purple crayon colored heart.
My scribbled love letter offered much hope.
Her first smile I'd seen since they'd been apart."



*Heart* IMPROVEMENTS *Heart*

I have no suggestions whatsoever for any improvements!


Thank you for entering your poem in the contest. I wish you the very best of luck!!


For The Broken Heart Poetry Contest




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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi! My name is Kristi and I have read "Maybe Tomorrow, but Still Not TodayOpen in new Window. and would like to offer you a review.



*Heart* THE POEM *Heart*

The poem delivers a simple message narrating the troubles that can be experienced from day to day that concludes with a positive suggestion on how to deal with them. I believe that any reader will be able to relate to these words.



*Heart* RHYTHM/RHYME *Heart*

I enjoyed the rhyme and only have one suggestion for the rhythm that I will mention below under "Improvements"



*Heart* SPELLING/GRAMMAR *Heart*

There are no spelling or grammatical errors. Great job!



*Heart* WHAT I LIKED *Heart*

I like the positivity that trumps the negative issues!! I always say, "Get out of the problem and into the solution" and this poem does just that!



*Heart* FAVORITE PART *Heart*

Enjoy what you’ve got and not what you lack



*Heart* IMPROVEMENTS *Heart*

The line: "It don’t really matter so long as we’ve still got today" does not seem to flow with the rest of the poem; it is just a tad too long in my personal opinion. I would suggest omitting "so long as" and replacing it with "while" or something along that line.


Thank you for sharing your personal work with us all!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello! On behalf of the "The Rockin' ReviewersOpen in new Window., brought to you by the Paper Doll Gang, I am happy to offer you my review of your item, "Constructive Conversation issuesOpen in new Window.

Note: Any suggestion that I may offer is strictly a suggestion and is yours to do with however you see fit. My method of reviewing is based on honesty first and how I hope to be reviewed second.


I. THOUGHTS FROM A READER

*Question* How did this item affect my emotional side?
This item struck a serious note in me and said a lot of things I wish I could say as eloquently. The sad thing about myself is, I tend to get too frustrated with people who take the easy way out of a discussion by blaming it all on, as you say, politics or religion. Let us please delve inside our own selves and analyze the issue for what it truly is, always having the objective of resolving it rather than just placing blame. Ten years ago, I was in a place in life where everything that was going on in America was tearing my guts out but I could not get anyone to even listen to my points - primarily because I was too angry. It took me a number of years, but once I calmed down, I noticed people would attempt to listen; I was just trying to educate (I am an avid researcher and never take anything for face value so I truly believed in my theories - conspiracy or otherwise). However, as I calmed down, I also noticed that my concern about the issues drastically dwindled. I was unable to reach anyone when the issues really disturbed me, so why try again? Sadly and ironically, I am a much happier person than I used to be when I let the issues of America bother me. Please don't get me wrong, I still care, but now it's on much more of a micro than a macro level; I tend to focus more on helping with local charities and organizations than fighting with my government (perhaps I just didn't know how to fight correctly).

*Question* Was the message contained within unique and thought provoking? Or comical and entertaining?
The message contained within was most definitely thought provoking.

*Question* Was the writing style easy to follow and pleasant to read?
The writing style was perfect for my desired reading. *Smile*

*Question* Did the item still have my full attention mid-way through?
This piece held my attention from start to finish, and actually, STILL has my full attention!

*Question* Is this a piece that I would highly recommend to my friends and family to read?
I found myself wanting to take bits and pieces and share them on facebook so my 1,000+ friends could take some notes! Yes, I would most definitely recommend this to EVERYONE to read.


II. TECHNICAL & MECHANICAL

*Bullet*(no matter if, of certain religion, race, sexual orientation, or religion)
*Idea* Religion is mentioned twice... is that on purpose?


III. OVERALL OPINION
I believe I stated my overall opinion in the very beginning of the review. I am grateful for open-minded thinkers such as yourself; knowing you are out there restores bits of my faith in humanity! Thank you so much for sharing.


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Review of Bad-ger  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
Okay, Blade Author Icon, this cracked me UP!

I want to start by expressing how much I enjoy reading your writing. Your style is one that I believe is perfect for readers; you have a vast vocabulary but do not go overboard. I am a very wordy person myself but shy away from writers who believe they have to suffocate the reader with 15 letter words every couple of sentences.

My ONLY suggestion, and this is just for aesthetic purposes, is to include a space between your paragraphs... it just makes it easier to read.

I can't wait for you to get more of your writings on here!

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Review of Confession  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Sera June Author Icon and welcome to WDC!!

Your description of "ConfessionOpen in new Window. states that it is a "fictional" confession but for me it was all too real. Well, the addiction part that is. I never had to confess as I was unable to hide mine (I was addicted to methamphetamine for 25 years).

I absolutely love how the female character chose to stay by his side, for better for worse. This doesn't happen much these days and it offered a refreshing feeling and restored faith in humanity.

So glad the character became clean and sober!!

Thanks so much for sharing and write on!
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Review of The Drive  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Blade Author Icon!! Welcome to WDC!!! I hope you enjoy the site at least half as much as I have over the years.

"The DriveOpen in new Window. held my attention from beginning to end as your writing is smooth and interesting. I kept waiting for something bad to happen, probably because I hate driving in these types of conditions. On Dean's last cigarette, I began to wonder if he would drop it and inevitably catch the car on fire which would be quite the opposite from the ice: fire and ice!

The ending reinforced my personal habit of refraining to drive in icy situations. *Wink*

Thank you for sharing and write on!!
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Review of Compromise  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi JoshMagwood Author IconMail Icon !

First, I would like to welcome you to the WDC world! I hope that you enjoy it here just half as much as I have over the years.

I love the message of "CompromiseOpen in new Window. and agree with every aspect that is mentioned. I detest greed, judgment, condemnation and selfishness and believe them all to be equal evils that have destroyed humanity in many ways.

While I enjoyed reading your beliefs, I would like to suggest that you consider using more punctuation in proper places in order to make your message flow more smoothly for your readers. Also, and this is only a mere suggestion, I liked how you began your message with examples of empires that were once strong and would like to see you use more examples throughout to make your points that much stronger. As I said though, this is merely a suggestion to increase the strength of what you already have here.

Again, welcome to WDC! Hope to read more of your work very soon!
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Review of Writing.Com 101  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Thank you so much for the writingML refresher! I have been on hiatus from the site for a couple of years while focusing on my higher education. When I returned today, I must admit that I was completely lost and could not remember even the most basic of the writingML. But after reading through the help, I think I am good to go! *Bigsmile*
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Review of A New Decade  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hi crimsonette!

First, I would like to welcome you to WDC! I bet you will absolutely love it here.

I am guessing that this is written about an upcoming birthday... perhaps hitting 30 or the Big 4-0. I love the undertone of the message as it explores both negative and positive aspects of life - something everyone experiences and can relate to - but focuses on only positive outcomes.

I thought the poem flowed smoothly until the line that reads: "My eyes have seen, my lips have kissed"... the rest of the lines rhyme but this one stands alone and it threw me off; I actually had to go back a few lines and start reading again. I enjoy the message of that line so I definitely would not omit it, rather include another line that enhances it with rhyme.

Great Job!! Again, welcome to WDC!
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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
Hi, S.J.

First, I would like to welcome you to WDC! I just returned back to the site after a couple year hiatus where I placed all my focus on my higher education, Your "letter/memo" is the first item I have read since returning!

Coming from a person who was never able to have children, I understand your message on a personal level. Throughout my life, (I am 43 years old), I helped raise three step-children and two nieces, yet still, I have experienced the same judgment you have. Although I could spend countless hours arguing your plight along with you, a large majority of parents will hold to their beliefs that those who are childless are clueless. Do not let them hinder you; do not let them get under your skin. Oftentimes, it is them judging their own mistakes in parenting.

I appreciate the voice in which this letter is written. You are kind, yet stern; that is a sign of an educated and enlightened person.

I am not going to offer any suggestions on edits as there were only a few inconsequential punctuation errors. Only thing I would suggest, to make the reading flow a tad smoother for the readers, is to leave a space between paragraphs (that is just a personal preference for me.)

Thank you for sharing your story with us and write on!
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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I love the message being delivered here. I am one who will always hold a door open for all walks of life: young or old, male or female, appreciative or not... wait, no I don't continue to hold doors open for those who aren't appreciative. I will literally tell them "you're welcome" just as hateful as I can. I know that isn't the proper way to be but I am thoroughly disturbed by their belief that I was put there for them at that moment. Thank you for sharing your lesson with us all!
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Review of How Am I?  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
Wow!!! This is intensity at its best! Each word providing its own visual description of Life. This is true talent and I am glad for the opportunity to have feasted my eyes upon it. Thank you for sharing with us all.

Kristi Love
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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The Old Fishin' Hole Open in new Window. (13+)
Wall Street's crashed but my dream lives on! An entry into Country Music Lovers Contest
#1521999 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


A true to life, albeit comical, little country ditty about the state of most of our wallets and pocketbooks. EMPTY!!


MY FAVORITE PART

What few dollars remained were soon under duress
and sucked into a black hole called the "I.R.S."
By the time all the leeches had sucked up my blood,
I was left with five dollars and my dog named "Bud".



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* Again, not a suggestion one do I have to offer!


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I love this one for many reasons, but I think mainly for the learned lesson that is summarized in the end. The majority of us can relate to the empty pockets, but can we all say we have learned how to roll with the punches of the failing economy? Yes, we need money... but we also need to be happy and money just doesn't provide the happiness that comes from the peace we find by connecting with the natural world around us; the world that doesn't cost a penny and that IRS can't tax!! Thank you for another splendid and brilliant write!!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Slowing down doesn't mean quitting the race! (Humor)
#1547713 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


A detailed and humorous piece about aging gracefully! This is awesome!


MY FAVORITE PART

Now my memory gets spotty.
It's a challenge I am facing.
I caught a lady yesterday
but forgot why I was chasing.

I still enjoy a drink or two
though it oft comes to naught.
More than one beer is wasted.
I have to pee a lot.



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* Ya know, I tried to find something, anything wrong with this poem, but could not! Therefore, I have no suggestions to offer for improvement!


OVERALL IMPRESSION

The picture you have included is more than perfect. The image lingered in my mind the entire time I read and added more humor to the message. You have to be my favorite poet of all time. You are fully capable of entertaining your reader in a variety of subject matters. Thank you for sharing your pure talent with the entire WDC world!


Warmest Best,
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Review of A Mother's Cry  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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A Mother's Cry Open in new Window. (E)
A mother's cry is like nothing else on earth.
#1408994 by ShellySunshine Author IconMail Icon


A very touching and moving piece about a mother's love and "cries" for a child that suffers from a mental disorder.


MY FAVORITE PART

Just like her pain, she carries it with pride.
Knowing without it, they would not survive.



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* If I were to make one suggestion, it would be to change some of the capitalization for the words that continue from the previous line. I do realize this is poetry and is not limited to any form of rules; it just makes it easier to read for me.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Michelle, this is beautiful and I understand completely why it has such a beautiful ribbon, the color of a mother's tears. Although I don't have children of my own, my heart goes out to you and Jackson and my thoughts and prayers are always with you both. You will come out victorious over his bipolar disorder; I promise! Thank you for sharing such a touching and personal write with us all!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Think.. what else should our lives be Open in new Window. (E)
An optimistic look on life...
#1601808 by sssam-on the way back Author IconMail Icon


A stupendous "optimistic look on life..."!!!


MY FAVORITE PART

What else should our lives be but the most thrilling experience imaginable
Of playing the lead character of a never ending best seller
Of composing each note to create that most celestial melody
Of rejoicing in the cool currents as we float towards our destiny



SUGGESTIONS

*Star* Of reaching forward to embrace our fortune
*Note3* There is nothing "wrong" with this sentence; however, I would like to suggest that you use a word similar to "embrace" as it was used just two lines previous to this one. I found it a tad redundant.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Oh my goodness!!!! This is truly one of my all time favorite reads. I honestly believe this should be printed on posters and plastered on the walls of every bank, doctor's office, convenient store, grocery store, department store, etc... for ALL the world to admire and adopt. THANK YOU FOR SHARING THIS WITH US!!!! I am marking this as one of my faves and hope you don't mind if I "spotlight" it on my WDC web page.


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Review of Family Reunion  Open in new Window.
Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Family Reunion  Open in new Window. (E)
Valuable gatherings.
#1571547 by jaya Author IconMail Icon


An endearing piece depicting fond memories from a family reunion.


MY FAVORITE PART

The group moved on to the moonlit lawn of Cupid and Venus


SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* The only suggestion I have is to make it a bit longer. I would love for you to embellish on some of the fond memories spent with family and loved ones.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Although I would have liked this to be longer, I still enjoyed reliving this family reunion with you. I could see the whole gang gathering out under the stars as the finale of the reunion drew near. I am from a tiny family who never plans reunions. I am saddened to say that is probably a good thing though, as most of the family members really don't care much for each other. So, I just "reunion" with my mother every day!! Thank you for sharing this with us all and keep up the great work!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Inner Thoughts of a Wandering Mind Open in new Window. (E)
Formerly known as "On My Mind" A piece of random thought.
#1318122 by Mike~Dolphins Fan 4 Life Author IconMail Icon


A short and concise piece that offers a glimpse inside the author's thoughts about self-attained, inner peace.


MY FAVORITE PART

If there was ever a need for crystallization, it would have to be for my thoughts. Too often they are clouded, and in dire need of positive injection.


SUGGESTIONS

*Star* they continue to influence, and shape how my life is,
*Note3* Consider removing the comma after "influence" as it caused me to pause unnaturally.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I am very impressed by your style of writing. You speak fluently to your reading audience and offer them an opportunity to get inside themselves to discover their own thoughts about both positive and negative energies that surround us all. I am huge on both aspects that encompass our lives and agree that there must be a balance of both energies. It is finding that balance that is the true challenge, then keeping it once it is found. I thank you very much for speaking your thoughts on this matter. Know that I am always on your side in your search for the positive!!! Keep up the great work and Merry Christmas!!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Hallucinations of the Heart Open in new Window. (13+)
Thoughts on the reality of love - a man's perspective (Dark Humor)
#1573848 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


A poem that begins with a lesson and turns into quite the comical piece! This is awesome!


MY FAVORITE PART

Pure love is perfection which few attain.
Most settle for less, amidst all the glitz.
As for myself, I'll avoid all the pain.
Can't we just be friends...



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* I have no suggestions to offer, although I tried very hard to find something wrong with this!! LOL


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I just want to make mention that I left out a piece of my favorite part above, so as not to ruin the ending for all future readers. I love how you take me on a serious ride with a lesson that needs to be learned, then quickly finish my reading experience off with your comical nature! I admire your ability to invoke more than one emotion in me in so few lines and words. Keep up the awesome work, my very dear friend!!


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Review of Party Platter  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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An idea to liven up a party turns out different than planned. (Adult Humor)
#1570132 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


Oh my goodness! What a delicious feast with a comical twist!


MY FAVORITE PART

As the drinks and evening moved on, we hit upon the scheme
to show culinary appreciation by licking the platters clean.
From nervousness to full out lust – the meal proved a success
and everyone enjoyed themselves and no one made a mess!



SUGGESTIONS

*Star* We did away with knives and forks, they just were no good.
*Note3* To me, when I read this line out loud, it sounded better when I reversed the order of "they just were no good" to "they were just no good". This could just be me though.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Although there were a couple of spots that didn't seem to flow as naturally as all your other poetry, I was still held captive by your talent. What I like best about this particular erotic piece is how it took me on a couple of different journeys. At first, I thought it was going to be a "swap meet", but was delighted to learn that it wasn't. The ending is incredible and I couldn't help but literally laugh out loud. Thank you again for another masterpiece!


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Review by Kristi Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Hearts On The Street Open in new Window. (18+)
She walks the streets at night. A different kind of love poem...
#1534112 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


This is a piece that needs to be read and understood by the masses.


MY FAVORITE PART

The grasping hands, the dance of skin, in cars and alleyways,
have not dimmed the love she feels, have not dimmed her gaze
toward a future where her kids can escape their destined role.
These momentary degradations cannot touch her soul.



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* I do not have one single suggestion to offer this amazing piece.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

This is, by far, one of my all time favorites. Not just from your port, but from every one of them that I have visited - EVER!! The message contained within reminds me of the old Bob Seger song, "Turn the Page" and the video that Metallica made when they redid the song. You are so right to urge us all to never judge, for we do not know what is in the hearts of others. We do not know WHY some people do the things they do and we are way too quick to shun when we have no real clue. Thank you for driving this point home through such a captivating poem.


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Review of Adriana A to Z!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Adriana A to Z! Open in new Window. (13+)
Adriana A to Z is a brief look at my writing partner. Written for the Angel Buddy Contest.
#1490094 by Mara ♣ McBain Author IconMail Icon


What a unique dedication and tribute to the author's best friend! This is way too cool!!


MY FAVORITE PART

S ~ Snarky…and yes people it is a word. LOL Even good ol’ Merriam-Webster has finally recognized it. It should have a picture of Adriana.
1 : CROTCHETY , SNAPPISH
2 : sarcastic, impertinent, or irreverent in tone or manner <snarky lyrics>
— snark•i•ly \-kə-lē\ adverb



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* I can't think of one single thing to offer as a suggestion for improvement.


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I am genuinely jealous!! *Wink* This is a brilliant and very creative way to pay tribute to a person who has touched your life in so many ways. This definitely puts an Acrostic to shame and I may have to "borrow" this idea from you and write my own tributes to a few friends. I thank you for giving us all the opportunity to get to know Adriana through your awesome, lettered descriptions! I bet she was thrilled and not at all snarky when she viewed it! This was a real pleasure to read. Thank you so much for sharing it with us all!!

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Review of Snow Angels  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
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A mother remembers the joy of children playing~A sestina poem 12/09 Quotation Inspiration
#1627458 by Mara ♣ McBain Author IconMail Icon


Quite an impressive piece that depicts the fun that can be had in the wintery snow!


MY FAVORITE PART

The dog bounds in taking the youngest to the ground.
The laughter is cheerful and bright;
as the two roll in the snow
full of energy and play.



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* Had I observed any errors or breaks in flow, I would mention them here. But, since this piece is perfect, I have no suggestions to offer!


OVERALL IMPRESSION

Being a native Texan, I am not accustomed to such fun. However, you successfully took me right there, right to the action packed enjoyment of kids, dogs and even adults romping in the glistening snow. I have had the pleasure a few times of delighting in this type of wintery fun, however those times were few and far between and quite long ago. It has been many, many years since I have had an opportunity to create a snow angel. Thank you for allowing me to venture there in my fondest of memories. This is a beautiful piece that can be loved by many readers of all ages!

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Review of The Ouija  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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The Ouija Open in new Window. (13+)
A scary but humorous look at the monsters of 2009, 2010, 2011 ... 2023, 2024
#1602627 by 🌕 HuntersMoon Author IconMail Icon


This is a spectacular read for anyone in the United States who has fallen victim to the cruel and inhumane current state of the economy.


MY FAVORITE PART

Creaking noises from the market,
as prices sag like Spanish moss,



SUGGESTIONS

*Note3* Again, no suggestion for improvement!


OVERALL IMPRESSION

I love your style, your humor, your out of this world poetic talent. You have taken me on so many different journeys, from sad to comical, from enlightening to inspiring. I honestly don't know which poetic genre best suits your skill; you have mastered them all! Thank you so much for sharing this great twist on the Monsters of 2009! This is priceless and I will be sharing it with my mother who will love it as much as I do!


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