wow that really makes you think,think bout all the fun you has before with someone who you thought you loved and than they throw it in your face i have expirienced it myself so i really liike the poem.
saw a few mistakes but it isnt anything major at all jus a few choice words i would of used like this part right here
by these walls between us.
but it is all writers choice and you are a very good writer from reading this one keep it up and remember that is just a suggestion to you
very good nice short an sweet i understand what that is like i am deployed for the second time in IRAQ and every night is lonely because i am not home with my wife and it drives me crazy but i guesss all i can do is make the best of it all
very good kept me interested and that is what you want to do when you write is keep readers interested i suggest you keep writing and try doing different types of writng like essay,poetry,short story the list jus goe on and on you will find one style of writing tht you are good at mind you that is just a suggestion
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