This piece is definately relatable! It rings true and is also quite amusing at the same time. I really enjoyed it, as I sat here at 5:30am, having the same conversation in my mind with my cup of coffee. :) As far as grammar and punctuation go, I would capitalize the first letter of line #7, perhaps use quotes for the dialogue, and possibly use exclamation marks in lieu of the periods for lines 9 and 16. Overall, great job!
~Paige Leigh
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I really enjoyed your story. It was very creative, and well written. I liked the fact that you took your time in painting the story, rather than speeding through to get to the end. You did very well by not allowing the reader to assume too early in the story what was going to happen. Making the noise move, and having Fred destroy his new apartment were nice touches. I liked that you end the story without explaining what exactly it is, most likely just in his head, that is causing the noise. Great job!
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