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Review by Keith Ham Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I think you'd be better off putting this in First Person, past tense, and not present tense. Present tense makes a story feel less like a story, rather it feels like a role playing game from the DOS era or a text adventure of some sort. You have something here, this is just how I personally feel about it.
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