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Review of Avenge my Weeps  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I admire the concept of this poem.

Instead of a couple sitting and discussing over a cup of tea, it ends with a single, consolling himself with tea.

A very nice concept. I struggled a little with your language structure eg " But why now? Oh dear. That your heart is hard. You will not hear."

Perhaps, if the sentence order was shuffled, it would flow smoother. Suggestion:
And so I ask "Why now, my dear?
Being hard of heart, you refuse to hear."

A great effort though. *Smile*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A very nicely written, clear, succinct message.

Well maintained meter.

I enjoyed the crispness of this. Thank you.
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