Nice! I too have been down the ugly lonely road of despair. Feeling like I've fallen down the rabbit hole, no one can touch that black hole deep inside. Thank you for sharing that!
Shayen, you've truly out done yourself here with this great poem about vampires! I don't see any where that needs any improvement at all! Thank you for sharing this and again for your wonderful review of mine earlier!
This was quite a nice change from the norm of the vampire stories i normally come across. I really liked the beginning when he was trying to figure out if it were summer, or not. You really had a great story here and I completely enjoyed the fact that you showed the story instead of just telling it. Thanks!
This was a very nice beginning! I can't wait to read chapter 2 which is next on my list! I too am working on a vampire story, but mine still needs a lot of work! You have a real flair for writing. So far this story is keeping my attention and I like the way that you're showing and not telling this story!
This was a wonderful story! You held me from the start to the very end. Thank you so very much for sharing this. I loved how poor Matthew misconstrued his dad's great deal and was honest enough to inform the police. It really makes one stop and think about how children can take things we say quite literally.
Oh this was a great story! I was totally pulled in and felt compelled to know the fate of both John and Kerrr. I was very moved when a new awareness dawned on John and he realized that not only did these beasts speak, but there were intelligent also!
As I sat here reading your poem I thought to myself, wow this is where you've been for far too many years.
I could feel the dispare, and feeling lost. The deep pit for you is a well for me. Thank you for sharing this because it really touched my soul.
This was a pretty good story. It really held a different view from the normal ghost stories by adding a bit of fantasy into it with the magic mirror. I really enjoyed reading it.
There are only two things that I feel need to be addressed with this short story. First you misspelled college. The second is that you truly had me hooked with this story and I feel that it would be really great if you continued it because I would really love to know what happens with David. Keep up the great work!
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