I really enjoyed reading this. The imagery and metaphors are great. I love the lines, "The self hatred for yourself pushes through." And the ending lines too. I understand where this story is coming from. Great Write!
I love this entry. Just being a teacher alone is tough. After reading this and knowing what you did for those kids-its wonderful! I grew up in a church too, never attended VBS but still it sounds fun. I love how you added quotes and bible verses. Just something, when you add quotes, make sure to put the quotation marks from begining to end. Great Write!
I really enjoyed this. It's sad and heartbreaking. I understand this to a certain level. I also experience some of this. I like how you're poured out your feelings. I do hope one day you two can be together.
I'm not a professional writer or anything like that level yet. But I like to give my input if that's okay.
I do like reading your flash fiction. This story made me laugh a bit. I got a full sense of where the character was and its purpose. The ending kind of threw me off. I get its a bit of a twist with the name and pants. Question, the bold font at the end, who is asking that question? And why everyone was calling him Jimmy?
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