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Review by K. B. Moore Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This story is very creative with vivid descriptions. There are a few grammatical errors, but it is very clear that this writer has a concrete grasp on how to properly communicate through words. Effectively pulls the reader into the story with the illustrative metaphors, but it would be better to stay away from word and phrase repetition - it can conversely pull the reader away from the story. The ending feels somewhat incomplete; though it's understood why the main character needed this rejuvenation, what is it for ultimately?
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