Initial Thoughts
I've never reviewed a poll before.... this should be interesting.
Post Thoughts
Mmm... reviewing a poll.... what is my opinion on this? Well, I feel this is an unfitting place to have such a question. That is like asking people in line at the local McDonalds if they like hamburgers. You need to ask the vegans the same question otherwise your results do not hold true. I promise more than 47 people (to date) don't like Writing.com
Initial Reaction:
I saw "Armageddon" and was immidiately interested
Post-Read Reaction
I'm glad I saw "Armageddon." this is a good story, and one we can all relate too. Not necisarrily the mottor delay part, but definitly confusion in religion and temptation, oh temptation. I really like this and would love to read more, also, reading this reminded me of that big scare not long ago about the rapture happening. I wonder, is that where you got your inspiration?
Overall
Interest Value: It's there
Idea Flow: Very Good
Imagery: Room for Improvement
Creativity: Not much... Yet I beleive
Would I read more?: Yes
Hmmm... Interesting. Honestly, my first impression of this story (the first paragraph) reminded me of The Outsiders
This is WAY too short to be "Chapter 1" so I do hope you either add more to it, or rename it as the Prolouge.
As far as your wording, I like it, but I do wonder what you mean by "corny," unless I am mistaken, "corny" is a synonym for "sappy," so that kind of confused me. Also it seems as though you want this story to be realistic... I am not aware of any people with orange eyes.
Overall View
Imagrey: Somewhat Lacking Interest Value: It is definitly there, but it is raw, I need a little more convincing before I say I'm interested Idea Flow: I'd say B- Ease of Read: It is very easy to read, but that is not always a good thing.
Now despite my creative critism, I would like to read more into this to refine my views on it.
5 5 5 5 5 5 5 5 5!!!! I LOVE THIS.... now to put it in more professional terms. At the begining I was skeptical, but I'm glad I read the whole thing. Please, please, give me more. I love this. I want to see this on the shelves of a book store hard covered with a close up picture of the mask and a black background and golden letters that say either "The Iron Lord" or "The Hawk." I say the second one because that is what I would name it if I was the author.... I wish I was the author. You have inspired many feelings in me, mainly jealousy that I did not come up with this amazing idea. There is some amazing Imagery and a great start to the story. So, here's the thing, there are two things I want you to do
Thing 1: Finish this book! I would love to read it as you go
Thing 2: Send me the first copy (hard cover of course because all good books are in hard cover)
Thank you for writing this
-Kale P.
(WDC Power Reviewers)
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