Simple poem. True that we think about here, there, and everywhere, even when we're not mentally or physically present. Poem has a nice rhythym to it.
*Last line- **As** fleeting as the sea
I enjoyed how you took the reader on a journey between the facets of life and how you connected them. A bit of a generic theme but your descriptions were wonderful.
Second paragraph quick fix- **attempt to skirt the dark recesses**
Overall great message!
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