Solid start, some ideas are to continue on with the story, what happens after that day, did she still didn't want to go to the collage after the first day, I see so much more potential in this story. I can't wait to review this later on.
Really inspirational, a great piece, little to no corrections needed, even though I am an atheist, I can see where you're coming from, keep up with the good work.
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