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Review by jay-t Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (3.0)
I like the twist about Charlie's wife stabbing him after the Banshee told him he was going to die. As a criticism, I think you need to cut all unnecessary words, prune the piece. Also I would say they characters need clearer goals and more change. Why does this banshee do what it does?
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