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Review by john Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (3.5)
I really like the flow of the writing, as well as the descriptive detail. Putting it in the First Person makes it that much more real. I found the ending to be a bit abrupt...it would be nice if it were "tied up" with the same descriptive detail as was used at the beginning.
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Review by john Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I thought this was a really neat way to put the anticipation of birth into a poem! If the intended audience is a young child, they might struggle with the word "translucent," but then I don't know what other word you'd use there and it DOES scan very well. I must confess to being disappointed when I got to the end and realized it was the end...I'd like to read more of your poetry.
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Review by john Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
The sentiment in this poem is very powerful, and has been expressed very well. My personal preference in poetry is for the meter to be a little more steady (some lines have only 3 beats, others 4 or 5) but then again that's just my personal preference- I enjoyed reading this!
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