I loved it, the irony and the twists. just lovely. Felt as if the story was squashed a bit to fit into the word size, personally I would have preferred it filled out a little more so I could have been dragged through each stage a little more. become a little more emotionally engaged in each stage. but a great sketch for a very good short story.
I liked this piece very nice twist at the end. the suspence through out wondering exactly what the object was that had ended up in the mix. I did have a nice sense of dread over it and was well confused by the 'smiley'. I would have liked to have had a little more work or consideration over the movements - the rewinding of events. This I felt was a little disjointed and had me more confused, one mystery was enough. overall I enjoyed it.
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