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Review of Eyes of the Birds  Open in new Window.
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi, I enjoyed your story, your descriptions are good and build a solid sense of place and action. Some sentences are a little wordy, but when you're describing the woman being dragged out of the boot and into the fun house, the short sentences work well, it lends a cool detachment to the actions which contrasts against the style of the opening. The last line is fun as well (in a macabre sense), very enjoyable.
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