Excellent. I would have given this a 5.0 if it had been a bit longer, but that is my personal taste and not an attempt to alter your art. I did find the last stanza seemd to break the flow of the first two, the tempo of sylabols not quite the same, but again, this is an artistic impression and not a recomendation.
I will be visiting your port soon to read some more of this fine work. Be proud...
Jon
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