That is a funny, uplifting and life-affirming piece of writing, Stephen. More please! I cannot, for the life of me, find anything to critique. It is just a good, rollicking ride. Thanks for taking us along.
I loved it. Great tension build up and a genuinely scary story.
Only constructive comment I have is on paragraph 12, the starting with 'At midnight...' it is too long and could be broken at 'maybe never...'
Good writing and good luck!
Witty, I found it a pleasant read, and I laughed. So you are doing pretty well.
Now, you centered it in the page text format. That is confusing, I thought I was reading a poem until I got more into the text.
Only point I would change in the text is the phone call, that should be played up a little just so that you grasp that he is answering a call and having a conversation with a third party.
Good going though!
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