Your writing is poetic and the content made my heart ache. I think you made great use of the prompt and explore the deepest fear of every parent, taking them to the one place they never want to be. The emotion is raw and powerful (kinda like a Hemmi) and I noticed no errors.
Fantasitc story. Good luck in the contest!
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