WOW. What a story! I printed it out to share with my brother. my brother loves a good spook. I know he will love this story just like I did. Shadow people? Did Herman turn into one of these? What really happend to Herman? Your flow was great, even plot. Awesome. Keep writing.
I love it. I printed this out to show my roommates and my family. Great writing. i do not think i could spend a whole night in the manor house. If I did spend the night then one of them ghosts got me. Keep writing. I hope to read more from you. Thanks for the spook.
I really liked your story. Kept me on my toes. The monster is in his bed, I like that line. The father has patience of a saint. I would have given up on this and made the boy sleep in his bed. Ok so i would make a mean mother. LOL. Keep writing. I love it.
awesome story. short but sweet. i loved the suspense. Was it bigfoot? A Yeti? was it the driver who was turned into this creature? nice rhythm and great flow. I printed your story to share with my family. I know my brother will love it.keep writing! I look forward to reading more from you.
Oh that is really sad. The thought of a child dying. The fear she felt along with the peace. Very well written in so little words. The flow was even and consistent. It had a sing song to it is the only way I can explain it. I can't wait to read more from you. Keep writing.
I really enjoyed your story. I never saw it coming. It had an even flow and captured me from the start. Wow. I liked the ending. In that space in the closet was the woman's body? Right? Thank you for the goosebumps. Keep writing. I look forward to reading more from you.
I really liked your story. The ease of your writing and the flow was great. I found it very creepy. My roommate has read it as well, I printed it off, and she agrees that the story is creepy. The Neighbour is a great title for it. I liked the description of Justin. Thank you. Keep writing.
It was cute. I did not find it to be a horror though not even scary. It was a good read though. I printed it so my roommates can read this too. My roommate agrees that it is not very scary but it is good. She enjoyed it and I made a copy of it for her.
Wow. I was hooked the moment I began reading. That must have been scary. The guy at the end was he part beast too? having somebody lay stuff out for you in your own home that you don't even know. How creepy is that? Keep up the good writing and I will look forward to reading more from you.
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