Now, I really enjoyed this piece as an interactive story. I think, on its own, with only you writing, it would even be a good novel story type. But, being able to actually change the story line, and see how other authors would put it themselves. Keep up the good work, because I will probably be reading it ;p.
It's a very good idea for this type of story. I, myself, am overweight. Im not huge, but I do wonder what it would be like if I were skinnier and ripped. And everyone wonders what life could be like if they could just get one wish, and it were to come true. I believe if you give people the utter power to have their future be determined by a single wish, no one will be truely happy. I also added a chapter that I think, will add a more interesting twist. Basically, you get what you with for, and your screwed if you dont like it.
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