I was caught from the beginning, waiting to see what the treasure was. I was so surprised at the end. For moment in the story I expected it to rats, but I love animal stories like this. I often wonder how so many people write stories like this and bring the animals to life. You did this very well, I really enjoyed this. Please keep writing.
Your story grabs at the heart and makes you wonder about how things are done else where. You make us feel what is happening as if it's happening to you. This such a powerful and painful story and brings tears to the eyes. As with so many things that are wrong this is one that needs to be changed. Thank you for this and keep writing.
Oh, this truly great and I love it. It feels me with happiness to know both Storm and Winyd lived. I can see future stories for them. Like Lobo and his mate, a true love story. This could be that way also but not with the same ending. Please write more about them together, their pups and the man. There is so many ways to make this story go and still be great. Again have to thank you for a story truly well written.
Another well written story, but I hope there is more to come. Again you've drawn me in and taken me captive with your words. This seems to come so easy for you. Your characters come alive on the page, like old friends. I will follow you in the future and look forward to more from you. Thank you.
Chapter Four wasn't here but my interest has been peaked. This is well written and you should be proud of yourself. If you haven't been published then what are you waiting for, if you have where can I get your books. There are so many thinks going on it keeps you reading wanting more, and leaves you wondering what next. I have seen other stories by you to be reviewed I will be reading them as soon as I'm finished here. If they are only half as good as this I'm in for a true treat. Thank you.
Sounds like Mom had plans on the house for a long time. Her parents couldn't or wouldn't let her have so she took it. Apparently Dad didn't want the house either so he had to go. Lucky for Jared he didn't say or do anything about the house until was gone. Well written and surprising, I expected something different but I like this ending, too. Keep it up.
Having been a long times smoker I can see both sides of this story. The lady felt she was being wronged, and I truly in understand how that feels. Smoking is now an affront to my nose. Before stopping I never knew just how much this bothered everyone else. Now as a smoker I know that need to have that cigarette no matter what or who it bothers. But on the side of the smoker I also understand that they have been driven into out of the way areas so as not to interfere with those who don't smoke. But on the other hand I don't feel its fair when a non-smoker enters that area and declares that stop on her account. She knew the area was for smokers and could just have easily done the same thing in the non smoking area to get a seat. So for a half hour she suffered and so did the smokers. But I believe that this is very well written. Keep it up.
All the is a stage and each of of us mere players upon that stage. You have captured so much here in just a small space. Words are our greatest weapons, they speak of love, hate, they can start wars or end them. So many hide behind their words to hide pain, shame or even weakness. Why can't people see what you have seen and have said with your words. Please word more, I wish to hear more of your words.
I like how you are drawn from the very start. You have the reader expecting one ending but you completely surprised by ending you do get. You have done a great job on this. I hope to read more from you in the future. Keep up the good writing and the surprizes.
I love this, because I love hats. I've never given any thought to my but now I realize that I do put thought into them without realizing it. You amaze me with all the different kinds of hats that you included. From now on, because of you, every time I see a hat I will wonder about the thought the person gave to it before they put it on. What a great idea this was, wish I had thought of it. Please keep up the good writing.
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