I felt this was alittle jumpy and hard to follow. Now that life I believe is far greater..felt this was out of place i reread tryng to connect it to sentence and couldnt. all and all though it is a deep piece of work that I can truly apprectiate. keep writing!! feel free to email me any thing else you would like me to read. i enjoy this kind of deep reading
Wow how wonderfully written. The emotion so clear, the truth so identified. This piece is one of the best I have read. I wasn't clear on who Theresa was for the most part you may put her in somewhere more identifiable. Also the two in the kitchen I thought maybe were your sisters. But other then that ' real' The feeling is so real. this a true story?
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