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Review by Jessica-Anne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is an excellent poem, very strong and full of emotions.
I love how it is through Tag's perspective- it makes the story come across as more real and honest, and it's easier to understand the raw emotions the dog feels because of his master's action.
I also very much like how the master realizes what he has done, the consequences of his actions. It puts truth to the idea of 'too little, too late'.
The one phrasing I would change would be the "favorite son" and "chosen one'. I don't believe they flow with the poem well.
Overall, well done!
Love, Jae
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Review by Jessica-Anne Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Tim,
I stumbled across this poem, and while I find it well written and deep, I worry that I am not fully understanding it. I've re-read it only to feel like I am missing something, though I'm not sure exactly what I'm missing.
However, I do understand the join between our young social and world economical situation. I like how you've shown it as a loop, because I believe that is how our society works: in circles. Your voice is clear in this poem, and it makes unarguable points.
I also like the structure; for reasons you may not comprehend, it reminds me of Dr. Seuss. The continuous sentence is not often seen like this in poetry anymore, and I definitely appreciate it in this scenario.
Overall, job well done. You have given me much to think about, which I believe to the be the mark of an extraordinary written piece.
Love, Jae.
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