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Review of Girlfriend  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was a really great poem! I think you could've given it a little bit more of a layout, I think the shorter stanzas could've been stretched out to make equal stanzas! I also think it was a little short, I think you could've put even more feeling in if you had given yourself more lines to do so. Otherwise, though, I like the poem, I can really feel the way you feel about this girl (if she's real- the ending makes you wonder: is this girl real? or is she just a fantasy?)
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Review of Sunset  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This story really tugged at my heartstrings. I didn't see the allegory for life coming, and when it hit me I had to reread the story to catch the full effect. The ending was spectacular, and you can feel the energy and love spilling from the man to his once-young bride. If I had to criticize one thing, you blew through some parts pretty quickly, and some more description in the middle would've made this stellar work even better!
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Review of Feelings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This poem really spoke to me, I am dying to read more from you. Please, please, write and share more!
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Review by JerseyBoy Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem really tugged at my heartstrings, and it got a lot more intense at the end. Which brings me to my criticisms- the beginning moves a little fast, and before you can swallow one phrase you're on the next one. But after a few sentences it gets a lot slower and more thoughtful, and overall I think this is a great poem. Good work!
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