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Rated: 18+ | (3.0)

I believe that your have an interesting idea for a story and i liked the fact that it didn't give away too much information at once.

My Tips-
1. You need to explain more about the setting. I didn't feel as though i could grasp the actual setting or environment in either parts.
2. Give the other characters a bit more personality. I could see personality in your main female character but thats pretty much it.
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