I was intrigued at first whilst reading this story it took me back to school and the lack of understanding of other students when another student showed talent? I was immediately sympathetic to the main character.
However, I quickly lost interest when so many family members/categories of vampires were mentioned. I had difficulty understanding who was who and how they were relevant.
I really liked the beginning and the main character at first. I think this story would have more strength if the believable side of the characters was developed and explained before moving into any vampire theme. There was no development of setting or description of characters which meant it was hard to visualise what was happening.
I think this is not really a short story but an idea for a novel. With more development of setting, characters and their relationships this story would have more stregnth.
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